You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice
Nowadays, money is most important factor in our life because we can not have good life without money. However, people are spending a lot money on business or houses or any other thing. So it is more vital to know how to spend our money. Personally, I believe that it is extremely beneficial to buy business, if you have enough money. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, if you have business then you make more money. I mean, if you buy house you can not make money any more, so it is better to spend money on business and make good life. However, in business if you are not do hard work then your business is not fully succeed because, hard work is basic needs of every business. For instance, my friend gained a lot of money from his father. He wanted to spend money on business but his family member said to buy his own house. But, he started a small shoe factory. He bought first material with cheap price and he could make good profit after making shoes and selling them in higher price. He was doing hard work. In fact, a year later, he could buy a big house with the money that he made from shoe factory. It has been six years since he founded that business and it is still very profitable. And now, he has been living good life in his own big house.
Secondly, every business needs employee to do work and management. So, business is create more jobs in society. However , unemployment rate is increasing day by day. Thus, it is good to purchase a business and give a job to unemployed people. For example, when my friend founded shoe factory that time I was unemployed and he gave me a chance to work in his factory. I accepted his offer. In fact, a year later, we felt to need more bigger space and more employees, so we hired more people in factory and many people got our jobs with good money.
In sum up, I prefer to purchase business instead of buying a house. Purchasing a business not only make money, but also creates more jobs for other people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, i mean, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32631578947 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23938816712 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1397129455 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.76 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196802742268 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625790087539 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832668612625 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129494364235 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715234598189 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.42 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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