When children get the good grades in the examination, parents would like to reward them with some money. In terms of this choice, can you talk about one advantage and one disadvantage?
As a famous people once said, “A child miseducated is a child lost.”Therefore, of great importance is educating children. When it comes to specific ways of educating, different parents definitely have numerous methods. In order to encourage their children, some parents choose to reward them with money when they get high score in examination. Both advantages and disadvantages lie with this act.
The main merit of rewarding money is that children can be encouraged and work hader to get more appreciation from their parents. Parents play a vital role in leading children’s behavior. The more money and praise they give to their children, the bigger efforts children make. Thus, children may present a good performance to obtain more money. It is a positive cycle. As they accumulate enough money, they can buy whatever they want, such as a toy or a robit model. I know a girl, named Jolie, she performs quite common in studying at first. Her parents give her much praise and money rewarding whenever she makes a progress. Gradually, miracle happens, Jolie makes her a top three student in studying in her class.
Everything has two sides. The disadvantages of rewarding money are apparent. To illustrate, children might become money-oriented and do something bad to acquire high grades. For instance, perhaps they may cheat on exams or lie to their parents when they do not get high scores. Granted, they do not want to live up to their parents’expectation, but the immorality actions they do may misleading themselves. Extremelly, some children may change their attitude toward study as if it is a tool to make money. They do hard only for money and forget the real meaning of learning. They even can not feel the happiness of learning. This is horrible for children.
Besides giving money, there are a variety of ways to encourage children in their study. For example, a summer trip to foreign countries, a experience to zoo and so forth. Rewarding money can be an effective way and a misleading way at the same time. Therefore, parents are supposed to make use of money properlly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
... and money rewarding whenever she makes a progress. Gradually, miracle happens, Jolie make...
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Line 3, column 688, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
...le happens, Jolie makes her a top three student in studying in her class. Everythin...
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Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...le, a summer trip to foreign countries, a experience to zoo and so forth. Rewardi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03133903134 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08519780033 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561253561254 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.309083334 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.9230769231 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246421117402 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763143109235 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693796908694 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166092722556 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613870489596 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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