When in conflict, financially struggling school districts should offer classes in music rather than visual art.
A glance at teaching art in schools that are suffering from financial difficulty always bring a light question that several times provoked discussions, that is, whether they have to invest their budget for music or visual art. Some people contend that if the school has only limited choice for their art education, it should rather be invested for music class than painting or other kinds of visual art class. However, I suggest that the choice should be visual art, in terms of cost saving and time efficiency. In the ensuing paragraph, I will try to shed some light on this point of view by providing ample examples and conspicuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned firstly is that it is cheaper to teach visual art than teaching music. There is a research that proves this standpoint. The federal government of art education the US investigated two groups of public schools on the total amount of money they spend on art education. The result showed that the group of schools where they decided to use their money for music class spent around 20,000 dollars per year more than the group of schools who ran visaul art programs. This was due to the fact that musical instruments are expensive than buying tools needed for drawing or painting, and also schools had to hire a music specialist to sustain the condition of instruments, which cost them extra money.
Another point to be mentioned is that the education on music takes more time than teaching visual art. My personal exmaple will prove this point of view. For me, it took around a half a year to become able to play Clarinet properly. Nevertheless, In visual art classes, I could use my ability to observe an apple and was capable of draw things on paper imediately, with few lines of instruction from the teacher. This demonstrates that schools who try to give musical classes to kids or students should start their course from lower grades, and it's not appropriate for schools where they are struggling with economic issues.
Although the foregoing points cross the mind at a first sight, it does not mean that they are the only one. Actually, there is another subtle perspective which must be borne in mind. It should be noted that getting engaged in visual art classes releases stress much effectively than the music classes do. For example, I had both music class and painting class when I was in middle school. And music class was especially stressful for me because I was not good at singing nor at playing a piano. Instead, all I was waiting for the whole week was the painting class, because the teacher let students draw whatever they want and that clearly helped me to relieve my worrisome thoughts.
Due to the above mentioned ground, I firmly believe that schools, where they are troubleshooting with financial problems, should choose to give visual art classes than music classes, and economically accessible tools and the benefit in time saving are two prime and momentous reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84282907662 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49903158242 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506876227898 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5489348469 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.380952381 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2380952381 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371636523935 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114536218011 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987647098734 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22685518676 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386906444113 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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