When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
When people move to another country, they should adopt and follow the customs of the new country for many reasons. Every country is different, and I prefer to learn about the culture of the new country because they have unique traits, personalities, behaviors, attitudes, culture and that is what makes them interesting.
First, learning new things every day is always good. Not only that, but also every time you learn something new, your brain creates new connections, and makes existing neural pathways stronger. For instance, when I moved to the USA a few years ago, I did not realize at first the importance of learning the spoken language. When I started learning the language, I was able to make decisions more easily in English than in my native language, and it also gave me confidence and self-esteem. Additionally, I started to understand more profoundly the culture, behaviors, personalities, and traditions in the USA.
Secondly, people tend to think that somehow they are going to start losing their old traditions and identity, yet the new country might have some customs that they find interesting. For instance, In the United States, cities often open an ice skating rink every year for the winter. At first, I refused to try skating because I had never done it before, but once I tried it I liked it, even though I fell a few times. Afterwards, I would get so excited every winter because I was able to skate again. Moreover, I enjoyed going to the Christmas markets, which we do not have in my country. I truly enjoy immersing myself in other cultures and learning from them.
Generally speaking, people should be open-minded when they start to follow the new traditions of the country in which they are living. To gain the full experience of a new country, it is necessary to immerse yourself in the culture. With an open mind and an optimistic attitude, they can not only adjust easier to a new country, but also enrich their life experience.
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Suggestion:
...unique traits, personalities, behaviors, attitudes, culture and that is what make...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86053412463 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69627639542 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551928783383 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2075805808 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.375 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233125679086 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715569566412 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780044384908 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151594246538 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083216036496 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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