When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
Physical education, music and art are important aspect of life in a student's mind. They help in building a students' character. If the school does not have enough funding and they might have difficulty in choosing between physical education or music and art. Physical education would have an edge over art and music to be retained.
First, physical education is important for a healthy lifestyle. In today's world, where fastfood chain is growing, it is developing an unhealthy lifestyle among people. Children are developing unhealthy eating habbit, which leads to obesity. They are not completing their full nutrition demand for the day. Therefore, obesity is on a rise and it is leading to various diseases. It also increases more days in hospital and its fees. Long school hours and loads of homework is also cutting short the time where students can have their excercise. In today's world of technology, students prefer to be locked down in the technological world than to go out and play. For them getting Instagram likes are more important. Therefore, sports is needed for a healthy development of a child.
Another reason is that students get an opportunity to apply for sports scholarships. All the colleges seek for students who are good at sports and decent at studies. They provide scholarships to students who excel in sports. Therefore, physical education at school opens up opprtunity for an average academic student to get a chance to afford for college. That can lead to a good professional sports player. For example, there are sport scouts of colleges coming to high school games to pick up their future college sports player. Physical education gives an average student a shot to mould their life towards a career.
Finally, physical education build character in a person. As physical education requires coordination of mind and body, it improves the coordination of a student. It also builds the concentration level in a students. Physical eduaction is important to generate a sense of discipline in life. For example, a sport that is played as a team create a sense of togetherness in between the players. It teaches players to take care of each other and have their back.
Altough, art and music is important aspect of life. In the circumstances where there is lack of funding, physical education should be chosen over art and music. Physical education creates a healthy life, give scholarship opprtunities and builds a character of a person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: students'; student's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08108108108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82768427246 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493857493857 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6469404716 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.9333333333 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5666666667 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.73333333333 5.45110844103 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170253615183 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484876483786 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653854366157 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122086377486 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772807511268 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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