Which of the following do you think is the best way for a student to make new friends?
- joining a sports team
- participating in community activities
- traveling
Undoubtedly, having an excellent friendship has a wide range of implications since students always spend a great deal of time with their friends. Some people believe that the best way for students to make friends is either joining sports teams or doing some social activities. However, others do not subscribe to these views, and they believe that kids or youth can befriend others readily in other ways. In my opinion, journeys are a brilliant idea to make new friends. I have two main reasons, which are explained as follows.
First and foremost, travel is replete with ups and downs, so students can know more about each other in different conditions. In fact, when students go on trips, they may encounter some obstacles which they can not solve by themselves such as losing their money, suffering severe wounds in the wake of a fall, to name but two, so it is necessary for other members to help those students. Nevertheless, the majority of students may not want to help those students in order to cope with their issues to their rescue. As a result, students can find their new friends who want to help them in those problematic situations because they would come to know who cares more about their issues more than others do. In addition, students may find some friends with whom they can have a cheerful time. Indeed, they may have more fun and create a wonderful journey with each other, so they can form a great relationship based on trust and compassion. On the other hand, when students attend social activities or join sports teams, they face issues less than going on trips which do not compare to the unpleasant experiences they may undergo while journeying, so they can not find intimate friends who may help them in some difficulties. As a consequence, students can find their desired friends when they help them feel better both in difficulties and happiness.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that travel provides conditions in which students should spend lots of time with each other. The cognition of peers is so difficult that choosing them as a friend in the shortest amount of time is not feasible, so students should spend a good deal of time with each other in order to know more about their feelings, lives, interests, to name but a few. Knowing more about people’s attributes needs spending much time since people do not show their inherent traits in the least amount of time.
Moreover, when students can talk face-to-face with each other for a long time, they can talk about their desires, behaviors, and the like, so students can find their friends whose behaviors and desires adopt theirs. For example, when I traveled with my classmates for one week, which is adequate time for me to know more about others, I could make some intimate friends on a trip as I gained some relative cognitions about their personalities and characters. Consequently, we decided that we could be friends because we had the same interests and thinking and outlook on some social, economic, political activities, so our attitudes towards some issues and desires brought about our relationship.
In summary, I do believe that travel is a bright idea to make an excellent friendship. As a matter of fact, trips not only provide some conditions in which students find their friends who have the same desires but also cause students to find their friends who care about them in stressful situations.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, for example, in addition, in fact, in summary, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 583.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8730703259 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59253002395 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449399656947 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 842.4 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5005072185 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.285714286 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7619047619 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215574719581 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820352034156 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722892984161 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145602270144 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556081617329 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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