Which one do you agree with?
Altough some people put forward that the government should cure the problems of the internet, other people claim that they should solve the matters of public transportation.
All societies have some problems and they should be solved to flourish. Two main issues are the internet and transportation. While some people put forward that the government should cure the problems of the internet, other people claim that they should solve the matters of public transportation. From my point of view, the government should concentrate on removing barriers to public transportation for two mani reasons which I am going to explore them.
First of all, one of the most important problems in many megacities is pollution and it must be resolved as soon as possible. Pollution is a key matter because it develops many diseases like asthma. Some schools, universities, colleges and public places may be avoided due to high concentration of pollution. Pollution may result in diseases and this increases direct and indirect medical costs. People may also not be able to work when they suffer from diseases. So, it has a deteriorating effect on the economy of a society because it both rise medical cost and people would be absent from their working places. Therefore, public transportation must be reconstructed and provide its infrastructures. For example, they can provide new buses, improve the roads, decrease the fare and so on. By implementing such policies, people may intend to use public transportation more than before. Hence, this policy should be taken into account for the government.
Secondly, people who live these days have many struggles and they are so busy. So, time plays a pivotal role in their daily life. They desire to save their time as much as they can. The reason is that they want to spend their time their family instead of wasting time. One of the best strategies is transportation. It is widely proven that proper public transportation saves time. For example, when punctuality is an important matter for drivers, engineers and so on, it is a good idea for people to use public transportation. People would use it if the government improve their punctuality and their road, import new machines and so on. In other words, when there is efficient public transportation, people may be triggered to use it. Because appropriate public transportation may save their time and they can spend more time with their family.
To wrap up, every community may have various issues and public transportation is a key factor in every society and the government should invest in the improvement of public transportation. They should do so because not only pollution would be averted but also the time of people may be saved. So, it is a great idea for the government to allocate more resources to this sector.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02050113895 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95293375606 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478359908884 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4030433831 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6296296296 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2592592593 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25925925926 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348011974785 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101077618344 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136922617318 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260967552852 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173567725653 0.0645574589148 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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