Some people claim that celebrities are more important for younger people, other people believe that they are more important for older people. Which one do you agree with?
The demeanors of people are changed by many factors which all are pivotal. They may follow some specific issues when they are a child and they do not follow it later. While some people develop the idea that celebrities are more important for younger people, other people hold the idea that they are more important for older people. From my point of view, celebrities are more important for juvenile compared to older people for two main reasons. In the following paragraphs, I am going to describe them.
The first focal point is that children tend to select a role model for themselves by nature. When children are growing, their personality and their characteristics are forming. So, they try to select one person to act corresponding to him or her. The majority of children prefer having a role model like celebrities. Because they are famous people in society and most people know them. They may also give to many activities such as charity activities. To do so, they always follow their movies, opinions, their page on social media and so forth. Young people enjoy acting like them and they like to do what their role model does. It is widely accepted that some measurements must be taken not to allow celebrities to commit bad behaviors like crime, corruption, bribery and so on. Because they damage both themselves and their followers. Consequently, it is a good idea to invest in training some literate celebrities to make a rich culture. Because they affect the behaviors of children and if they behave appropriately, young people would follow such proper behaviors.
Young people have fewer experiences in their environment. They have less knowledge in comparison with older people and they cannot express their opinion without any help. So, there must be someone to helps them organize their opinions. Celebrities may be more available thanks to technology. They may be seen in a theater, in the movies, on Instagram and so forth. They may mention their opinion related to different subjects of society. For example, I always have been into politics, a controversial issue. I vividly remember when I was a child, I always followed actors who played roles in politics. The majority of their fans have been young people. They are followed because they are always on TV and they can be seen. Due to various opinions related to various fields, they can be a good source of information. It also should be stressed that some of them may have incorrect information and it is necessary for everyone to differentiate them.
In conclusion, the personality of people is influenced by many factors and they should be taken into account. Celebrities and their opinions are more important for young people compared with older people because they not only need a role model but also, they have less knowledge and they may have to think of celebrities as a source of information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94639175258 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70052407301 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447422680412 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6469114796 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3870967742 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6451612903 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8064516129 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359732097487 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094348968406 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124878007504 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290747890565 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167223011369 0.0645574589148 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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