which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends: joining a sports team, participating in community activities, or traveling?
Nowadays, people often hold different perspective on which is the best for a student to make new friends. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that the easier way to make a friend is participating community, while others would mention that the question depends on a great deal of factors. As far as I concerned, I adopt a firm position that joining a sport team is the best way to make new friends.
First of all, it is important to consider the expense of traveling. Certainly, some people have a lot of money to travel the world. However, in most people do not have such money and time to travel the world. And joining a sports team does not need much money. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. I remember that my father aways working during my childhood. One day, he takes me to a tennis camp to learn how to play tennis. This is good experience to me, because I make many new friends there. As you can see, joining sport can make new friends.
Equally important is student focus on the common interest in making friends. Of course, for some students in some situations, making friends does need a common interest. However, it would be fair to say that for most students it will be a great way to make friends through joining a sport team. Take a case of CJ, a friend of mine whom I have known for 10 years. He joined a soccer team when he was a college student. Because soccer is a team sport, he made a lot of friends. Basically, every sports need the team spirit to put people together and win the match. And with the spirit people can have a long-term friendship.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that joining a sport team is a right choice to make a friend. Not only will meet a true friend but also learn a team spirt. That is why every students should join a sport team.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
... joining sport can make new friends. Equally important is student focus on the commo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43266475645 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45161718949 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487106017192 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0167992729 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.2608695652 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1739130435 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82608695652 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423125075705 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117019212249 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102416013201 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263729259957 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636210651986 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.82 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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