While most of the people prefer to travel to foreign countries, others are of the opinion to visit different parts of their own country
If we look at the history of the world, different people made various decisions about the place they want to spend their vacation. While most of the people prefer to travel to foreign countries, others are of the opinion to visit different parts of their own country. In my view, people should priorities about seeing their own country before traveling to other countries. Many reasons prove my standpoint, and I am going to explore some of which in the following essay.
First of all, In this turbulent economic environment, this is not a good decision to exit the dollars out of the country and spend them in other places. Almost all of the countries had a financial issue recently and there is a high responsibility on the shoulders of every individual to try to keep money in his or her own country. To be more specific, by traveling to other countries and paying a lot of money on the journey we do nothing more than transferring our assets to another place and making our own country poor. As a perfect example, Iran is suffering intense financial condition and not only do people schedule plenty of out of country journies but also they spent most of their revenue buying useless things more expensive than what they really cost. Through this example, we figure out the importance of traveling in the country to circulate the country's property in the inside instead of outside.
Furthermore, it is important for people to get to know their own country in the first place. Hardly are people familiar with sundry aspects and people of their own culture and hardly do they incline to get to know them. However, this is critical for every single adult to be able to answer other's question about her or his country. As you know, a country is part of its habitat's personality and one by bolding his or her country's values could acclaim his or her own status as a human. My own country is a compelling example of this concept. Iran is a broad country consist of different cultures, people, and environments in which people not only could experience fantastic adventures but also have the opportunity to discover hidden aspects of their invaluable home. That is why people should know different parts of it.
To summarize, views differ considerably when it comes to the issue where people should go in their journies. Personally thinking, visiting different parts of our country is superior to seeing other continents owing to the severe financial condition of countries in nowadays world and the importance of familiarizing with different cultures in varied parts of a country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... and spend them in other places. Almost all of the countries had a financial issue recentl...
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Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Hardly' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: Are Hardly
...w their own country in the first place. Hardly are people familiar with sundry aspects and...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...severe financial condition of countries in nowadays world and the importance of familiarizi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, while, you know, first of all, in my view, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66177311912 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490950226244 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9360969491 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.166666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492921968174 0.236089414692 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166191218764 0.076458572812 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186016139213 0.0737576698707 252% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318612558082 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144280829464 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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