Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities?
Throughout the history, people making a great deal of attempts for earning various benefits are doing wide range activities. With this regard, some people are more appealing to the specific range of activities and sports which are dangerous from else people’s viewpoint. In my opinion, although some activities are very dangerous also those can hurt people’s body, some people choose these activities for some reasons, such as experiencing more excitement, and showing their high abilities and I will clarify my reasons hereunder.
First and foremost, nowadays, people always are involved in mundane work that causes most boring, tedious senses in their daily life. Therefore, they tend to some activities with high risks to get more enjoyment, also their time is elapsed with the euphoric experience. Additionally, taking more excitements during the day leads to their body produce happy hormones as endorphins to improve their body systems get healthier. As the standpoint of psychology shows that when people are doing highly dangerous activities, their bodies have more robust than others bodies also taking more pleasure in life.
Secondly, throughout the history of humankind, past people like to show their exceptional abilities in the various ways, such as wrestling, swimming in cold water, lifting heavy stones and so forth. On the other hand, in the contemporary world, people are showing their courage with conforming dangerous sports, such as Parkour, and climbing without equipment. In fact, they think that with their act can tempt the eyes of people to see them, then people applause their actions accordingly. For example, many interesting people around the world attend in the Roam, also known as the city of Parkour, to see the dangerous acts of Parkour being acted annually. Therefore, people are doing dangerous activities being at the center of attention, so that they acquire pride from them.
In summary, most of the advice is recommended that people try avoiding dangerous activities for maintaining their health. However, some reasons do not let them conveniently overlooked these acts. Actually, people are doing those acts not only for escaping ordinary life to take more advantages, but also getting more pride in people and showing their abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: this can; those cans
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, in fact, in summary, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40782122905 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68182610453 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555865921788 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5945509252 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.066666667 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6 5.45110844103 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307908097568 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119314323495 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775980199655 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211242367235 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689675202267 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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