Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, as modern society develops, more and more people tend to explore new things, take risks, and differentiate from others in their lives. One of the most significant ways to take risks is doing dangerous sports or activities. People’s attitudes toward reasons for doing hazardous activities vary from person to person. In my vantage point, people try to do risky activities due to enhancing their personal lives and earning a vast horde of money.
First and foremost, what provokes people to engage in perilous activities is a dramatic positive influence they offer in their lives. Human’s life is analogous with a tortuous way in a mountain in some aspects. Doing dangerous activities helps people to take a break from a hectic life and to unwind by concentrating on what they do. Consider a disappointed person who is sinking into an abyss in his life and has no motivation to cope with his problems. Not only can these activities make them more energetic, but also they may forget their life failures. Crestfallen people, such as who have been fired, deem dangerous sports as an opportunity to please themselves by showing off their abilities. According to recent research conducted by psychologists from the University of California, Los Angeles, the excitement produced by these activities instills valuable concepts, such as determination, ambition, and hope in the ups and downs of life. That is to say, the sense of accomplishment gained from doing dangerous activities can raise their self-esteem.
Another subtle point is that they can accumulate a lot of money by doing weird and high risky activities. One of the rigors of living in the hectic modern life is choosing a career which gives the person a large income to lead a fancy life in the future. It is crystal-clear that a person who opted for a risky job earns much more salary since they need unique skills. As an example, I have a close friend who graduated from one of the most prestigious universities in my country. Although he had several opportunities to work in big companies related to his field, he opted for a risky job in an amusement park owing to an alluring salary. As a result, his choice changed his life not only because he supports his family financially, but also because he experiences an independent life economically speaking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, such as, as a result, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96717171717 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93700113479 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550505050505 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7951349015 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.277777778 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162348548898 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582542148295 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603305363087 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120963077419 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741817985443 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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