Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I don't like dangerous sports or activities, because I don't put myself into the fear of death just in order to playing sports and doing some recreations. But I think those who like to play dangerous sports or take part in dangerous activities are attracted by some fascinating factors which are specific to such dangerous sports or activities.
First, one of the motivations for such sports or activities is the thrill. They are enjoying the thrilling situation that they are doing something dangerous. For example, one of my friends plays American football as a member of university team. I know he often gets seriously injured while practicing and playing, and I sometimes ask him why he continues to play football when he knows he will get injured again. Then he answered like this: he is enjoying the thrill of exposing himself in danger. As you can see from this example, those who likes to play dangerous sports or do some dangerous activities likes to be in the extreme thrill of putting themselves in danger.
Also, another motivation is that they want to do what other people can't do. One of my relatives likes to climb the mountains, and he often tries hard climbing dangerous mountains which have harsh climate and steep places. He says that some day he wants to challenge climbing Mt. Everst. He says he is satisfied with achieving some goals which is dangerous and difficult, and that he feels like trying another once he has achieved one. Like him, those who attracted to dangerous sports or activities are attracted to achieving what other people find fearful and can't achieve.
- TOEFL Official Guide - Practice Test 2 - Integrated Writing 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
I dont like dangerous sports or activities, be...
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Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ngerous sports or activities, because I dont put myself into the fear of death just ...
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Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... that they want to do what other people cant do. One of my relatives likes to climb ...
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Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ving what other people find fearful and cant achieve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 272.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86764705882 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62448503764 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6693632037 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.846153846 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30707414418 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123145324709 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11001578588 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233368883896 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701158804864 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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