Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Recently, technology has enabled us to live more comfortably than before. We can acquire information from all over the world owing to the Internet connection, and new entertainment has appeared. Also we can get improved healthcare system and treatment for diseases. So, in my view, because the world is changing so quickly, people now are happier and more satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Nowadays people are enjoying new types of entertainment which could not have been conceived some decades ago. For example, many companies devised different kinds of game machines, such as Playstation, with which we can play a variety of sports games. Also we have access to "virtual reality experience", in which we wear three-dimensional glasses and
feel as if we are travelling through the space. Due to the appearance of these novel exciting enjoyments, we cannot be bored in our free time, and can be satisfied with our lives.
In addition, we saw much progress in the field of medicine in this century. We have improved prophylaxis for infectious diseases, and pathogenesis of many complicated diseases have been revealed. For example, in twentieth century, we did not have effective treatment for some serious infectious diseases like tuberculosis, type B hepatitis. Also we have new kinds of treatment for the cancer with low invasive levels such as laparoscopy. Controlling diseases lead to better quality of life, so improvement in medicine has definitely brought us happiness.
Furthermore, as we are connected to the world via the Internet, we can easily enjoy foreign cuisine and cultures. For example, nowadays many foreign people introduce their native foods and the way to cook them on Youtube videos. We can enjoy rare meals just by imitating their videos. Global intercommunication makes our lives rich, and we can satisfy with such fresh experiences.
As I illustrated in the previous paragraphs, different kinds of technology have changed the world so much. Although some new problems, like air pollution and global warming, have appeared, they contributed to convenience and happiness of our lives so much. So I do not agree with the idea that people are less happy or less satisfied with their lives in this rapidly changing world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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...es like tuberculosis, type B hepatitis. Also we have new kinds of treatment for the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, for example, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27520435967 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0416116413 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550408719346 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0902118184 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23247272627 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829376336491 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143400367616 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138861933127 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125227095973 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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