Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my view, it is more enjoyable to have a job where I work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Spending longer hours at one time will be efficient in everything, and I want to spend a whole day off.
We can spend consecutive hours and days in family activities if we can have four days off in a week. For example, if we have consecutive two days off, we can go travelling. Also, if we have a day off, we can play sports with our families. Thus this system will allow us to participate in a variety of activities.
Also, spending long hours consecutively on a job will be more efficient than short hours. Generally speaking, efficiency of a certain task is at its best after we spend about an hour being involved in it. Once we quit a task on the way, we have to remember where we finished last time. In addition, if we have longer hours to spend on work, we can do what cannot be done within shorter hours.
Furthermore, working three days a week for long hours will be good for health mentally and physically. If we have to work five days in a row, we have to get early every weekdays, and we are more likely to catch a cold and are more stressful due to lack of sleep. Actually I am a medical student and participate in the internship in the University of Tokyo hospital. Usually I have to go to school at nine in the morning and finish at 4 p.m. However, while I am in an emergency department, I go to the hospital four times a week and spend longer hours, from 8 a.m. to 8 p.m., each time. I prefer the latter because I can concentrate on extracurricular activities like swimming, participating in a volunteer, and so on.
To sum up, spending long hours in a row will be more efficient and some tasks and activities cannot be finished within short hours. This is true not only for a job but also for a vacation. That is why I believe that it is better to work shorter times for longer hours.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in short, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24802110818 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59544518838 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456464379947 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9961803732 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4444444444 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37123760535 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135252076835 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166568556858 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259830161232 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168392911639 0.0645574589148 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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