Wild tuna, a species of large ocean fish, have decreased in number because of overfishing Recently, attempts have been made to farm tuna by feeding the fish in ocean cages until they become large enough for sale. However, tuna farming has faced several problems and criticisms.
First, female tuna do not lay eggs in captivity, so tuna farmers must capture large quantities of young wild tuna to stock their farms, further reducing wild tuna populations. These young tuna are caged and fed until they are large enough to be sold. Since the captured females in tuna farms cannot lay eggs to replace the tuna that are sold, tuna farmers continue to catch young wild tuna to keep their farms going and so worsen the decline in wild tuna populations.
Second, tuna raised on farms are very expensive because they depend on a costly, high-protein food derived from other fish. Tuna feed almost exclusively on small fish, which supply them with the proteins and nutrients they require. A single tuna can grow more than four meters long, weigh close to 700 kilograms, and eat 70 kilograms of food a day! It is unlikely that tuna farms can remain profitable while supplying so much expensive food for the tuna.
Third tuna confined to ocean cages are likely to become infested with parasites, organisms that feed on and weaken the animal they attach to. Tuna farmers off the coast of southern Australia have had problems with infestations of blood flukes, a type of parasite that lives within the blood vessels and heart of infected fish. Parasite infestations weaken tuna, slow their growth, and can even cause death, usually by making them susceptible to other diseases. Tuna farms in southern Australia have had 10 percent of their tuna die before they could be sold.
In this set of materials, the reading and writing both discuss the wild tuna. The writer strongly postulates that certain concerns are raised because of tune farming which was initiated to recify the overfishing problem and, provide three major concerns to endorse its idea. However the lecturer mentions that there is promising solution for each of the problems mentioned in the reading and, gainsays each of them.
First and foremost, the writer begins by asserting that young tuna fishes are transported to the cages of tuna as tune fishes cannot lay eggs in captivity, soi enorous number of tuna are delivered one oafet other that is adversely affecting tune's population. On the other hand, the lecturer dismisses this point by insisting that that this solution is overcome by injecting specific harmones. To be more specific, the hormone enables the tuna fishes to lay eggs even in captivity. therefore, the risk to the tuna population will be diminished.
Furthermore, the lecture posits that though tuna need high protein diet but only fishes are not source of their nutritional diet. He goes on to say that there are certain plants whoi can be processed to provide diet for tuna fishes.because of its lower price this solution will be economical. These points clearly refute the writer implication that tuna only feed on protein diet which can be only acquired from other small fishes.
Ultimately, the writer wraps up its arguments by declaring that captivity could cause prasitic infestation among tuna and exemplifies that with blood fluke in Southern Austarlia. Not surprisingly, the lecturer takes an issue with that by contending adequate steps could be taken to prevent infestation.for sake of illustration, when tuna were transported to the deep water height, the blood fluke could not grow.Due to the reason that blood fluke only brow in off shore or shallow water. Consequently, if tuna are moved to deep water location parasitic infestation could be limitized.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17757009346 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72229584954 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566978193146 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.269219935 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.846153846 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217944595087 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805678421715 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461245783966 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127867220413 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440069009627 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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