You have been asked for some suggestions to make your hometown a better place What suggestions would you make and why

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You have been asked for some suggestions to make your hometown a better place. What
suggestions would you make, and why?

There are manifold ways to ameliorate my hometown in order to provide good conditions for citizens. If I were asked for some suggestions, I will propose them as effective ways to make my city better place in the following essay.
First and foremost, is giving a permission to invest companies for building up modern restaurants, malls and sport centers. I believe that those amenities will definitely improve local's lifestyle, because after tough working day some people would love to enjoy by visiting them. In fact, there are numerous old soviet edifices with no function. Consequently, they should be renovated into places for entertainment purposes. By demolishing old buildings with no significant means we would not only replace them with other useful ones but also will change the overall vision of the street and will looks better.
Furthermore, the extension of the green belt in my city is critically important. We have a few parks within the urban area. However, there are not sufficient for the number of living people there. No one can deny that having more parks and gardens would have positive effect in the quest to make my hometown better place. Every morning people make jogging and walk their dogs along streets, owing to the fact that closest park is afield and they can't go there. I believe that every community should have it's own greenery where everyone can practice his activities and daily routines.
Lastly but not least, significant factories' shifting from city's area to out city is need it. Those manufactories have cause a lot of damage to pedestrians, because they emit greenhouse gases in the city's territory. Accordingly, commuters breath the hazardous particles that might cause respiratory diseases and other illnesses. If industrial building are out of city, they will not deteriorate and shorten citizen's lives.
In conclusion, there are multitudinous ways to bettered my hometown. The most essential are replacing old building with new ones that have function. Also, making more parks and gardens for those who want to spend leisure time. And of course, supplant all factories out of city's area because they emit noxious gases.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, so, in conclusion, in fact, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14447592068 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67914093439 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603399433428 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0769733773 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4761904762 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186581746864 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530235858262 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624460513291 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110533717551 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623765904114 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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