Environment is a very important part of our lives. According to national records the country that I live on were pollute more than past years and the rate is such high that make us feel stunning. Actually, It has been doubled. Regarding this, the question asks about the best way to improve my community. From my point I view, I postulate that we must attempt to raise the number of green-space and what it follows I will attempt to address the most discernable reasons.
First of all, green-space area refines air pollution. Accordingly, people can see the area easier and more visible. The intrinsic problem with air pollution is that limits visibility. For instance, the city that I live on ’Tehran’, multiplicity of factory has been established; like car manufacturer or rail road producer. Since they work all the days and night the environment made polluted in a higher rate. More green-space can change more dioxide carbon to oxygen. So as a result of the area will be refined easily.
In addition, green-space area influence on healthiness. If the people breathe fresh air they will not suffer from respiratory disease in which is very common in elderly people. For example, according to the government records; more than fifty elderly people have difficulties in breathing. Therefore, green-space area purifies all the pollution and help the elderly people to solve their problem.
Finally, green- space area has influence on life expectancy. Correspondingly, it helps people to see more green area that help them to be more fresh. For instance, last night saw a documentary about city of ‘Nakazaki’ in japan that was under atomic attack in world war II. The program explains that because of attack all the area are infertile and it declines average number of death in people. So the government lie some kind of green net to compensate that. And the result was decent. From that documentary I learned the effect of green-space area.
All in all, as the aforementioned examples have illustrated, more amount of green-space area will help to people to live effectively. I strongly believe that the government should increase green-space area.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...onal records the country that I live on were pollute more than past years and the ra...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'polluted'.
Suggestion: polluted
...records the country that I live on were pollute more than past years and the rate is su...
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Message: “So as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n change more dioxide carbon to oxygen. So as a result of the area will be refined ea...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...en-space area influence on healthiness. If the people breathe fresh air they will ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, finally, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11235955056 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06184929345 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544943820225 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1291279732 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.8 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.24 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0353400542015 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0104214360092 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159601692098 0.0737576698707 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0260951030273 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160002914292 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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