You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?
It is common for people to invest their savings in businesses and other similar projects, especially when their business flourish and provide them with huge profits. It creates a big deal of perplexion between people whether to invest their money in such profit gaining projects, or utilize that in building a house. I will prefer to invest my saving in constructing a house. I explain the reasons for this choice in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, house construction will be a great source of profit with minimum chances of loss. An immense surge in the housing market makes it possible for the house owners to infuse their funds in building new houses. Moreover, renting a place is a perpetual increase in the tenant’s expenses; so, they are investing more in houses and using their incomes in paying the mortgages of their house. For instance, I used to pay a large sum of rent for my apartment, now after buying my new house I use that money in paying my mortgage. It not only releases my tension, but I have also guaranteed that whenever I will sell my house, I will get almost double of the price. Therefore, people tend to invest more in buying houses not only because it will be adventitious but also secure their future.
Secondly, everyone is busy in their life nowadays, that it is arduous for them to take their time for themselves and family. It is the need of the time to have one’s own home where one can spend joyful moments of his life with his family and relatives. For instance, I always wanted to have my house which I can decorate according to my personal preference. I once tried to paint my rooms in my apartment, but I had to face consequences by paying a heavy fine there. Another reason which encourages me to buy my house. In conclusion, businesses can never provide me with such a stress-free and prosperous life.
In a nutshell, it is up to everyone how they want to spend their savings, but I think buying a house will provide their families with memorable moments of life with the sure-fire certainty that they are not ruining their investment, rather multiplying their savings.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment, rather multiplying their savings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72311827957 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6387321883 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513440860215 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5498071742 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.352941176 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116684582664 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043821297674 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312268172533 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.072068893056 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291108062389 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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