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You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

If I have enough money to purchase either a house or a business, I would choose to start a business with that money. The reason Behind this is, I have some business idea in my mind, when I got an enough money so I start to implement that idea. And also, I think I can manage with the house which I have already. In my point of view if I started a business and it goes well so, I can buy a big house than now.
I choose to start a business because, I have been working on it since I completed My graduation. I was planning to start a food business, a small restaurant or a café. The area where I lived, having a colleges and offices nearby, and also in this area there are not so many food places. Students and office worker went to another area for their lunch. So, If I started a small restaurant which includes the local food and some beverages that will convenient for the everyone who worked in that area and also for the students, and also that will beneficial for me because in this area there are a less cafes and small restaurant are available.
In addition, starting a food business, need less investment than the other business. So, that also make the more sense to start a business. Also, it doesn't take a lot of efforts, the only thing I have to focused is the authentic taste of food, and maintaining hygiene. Once people start liking your foods taste then they start telling to the other people and that will to grow your business.
Therefore, for me starting a business will be more beneficial than buying a house. Once I start earing a money, then after I can buy a house. For if I got the enough money then I will buy a business.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 463, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'everyone'?
Suggestion: the; everyone
...some beverages that will convenient for the everyone who worked in that area and also for th...
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Line 2, column 597, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun cafes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...for me because in this area there are a less cafes and small restaurant are availabl...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ess investment than the other business. So, that also make the more sense to start a bus...
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Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ore sense to start a business. Also, it doesnt take a lot of efforts, the only thing I...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, therefore, well, i think, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.26433121019 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40162232009 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449044585987 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 434.7 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.851183613 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6875 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18927318734 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806228594817 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988502923285 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133168203044 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112910916944 0.0645574589148 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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