You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose
to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Having some money and not knowing how to spend or where to invest it in, is a tough circumstance. Some people subscribe to the theory that buying a house is the best way to spend the money, however, others hold the view that investing in businesses is the right call. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely spend the money on a house. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my point of view.
First and foremost, in comparison to buying a house, purchasing a business is a risk that could lead up to one losing most of their money. In other words, in order to become a business owner, one should be comfortable with the chronic existence of the possibility that they could lose everything at any moment. For example, my uncle won the lottery a couple of years ago and he decided to invest all of that money in a startup company, because he taught there might be some prospects for him there. After a couple of months, he realized that the company is not meeting with success, so he tried to put in more money by selling a couple of his properties, which led up to him losing his livelihood. If my uncle had never invested his money in a startup, he would have never become broke. I am personally not the type of person who is comfortable taking risks, thus spending the money in a new business is not the best choice for me.
Second, the purpose of having a good job and running a business is for one to gain the ability to provide their primary needs and own property. Additionally, rent is one of the major expenses in most people’s lives, therefore by purchasing a nice house in a convenient neighborhood, one could save the money they normally pay for rent. For instance, I use 50% of my income paying for rent and I use the rest of the money to pay off bills, consequently there is no money left for me to go on a trip or buy new clothing items with.
To sum up, purchasing a house rather than a business would be a better choice in my case, since I tend not to take risks and I would be able to travel with the money saved.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32041343669 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53692821749 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514211886305 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.016606913 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6428571429 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18936293895 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719382207123 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437627114456 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128612669365 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028503521635 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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