You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which one would you chose to buy? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
For all intents and purpose, people like to invest their capital on things like houses and automobiles because they like the sense of comfort brought by such assets. In my personal opinion, I can say with utmost confidence that if I had myriad capital, I would definitely invest in setting up and expanding my business. This preference will be exemplified in the forthcoming paragraphs focusing mainly on two fundamental reasons.
A startup business, albeit somewhat risky, would be more reasonable choice as it could eventually bring with it financial profits, which is one most essential thing that aspiring entrepreneurs often strive for. In contrast, owning a house might be fraught with plethora of maintenance and personal expenses. Today, most of the financially able people have their own startups and are the part of some kinds of businesses like office owners, shareholders or some form of market owners. Initially they invest their money and gradually they expand their business. On a long run such endeavors pay off so well that they can generate huge amount of profits. An example of my own country would justify its significance. Until recently we did not have online shopping platform. One of the recent graduate students from college with computer science background has recently launched an online shopping platform and people have started using it heavily. Moreover, he has been an epitome for other people with similar background to come up with new business idea and generate profit out of it. Had he invested his capital in buying personal assets, he would not have generated profits rather wasted it.
In addition, anyone involved in business, can learn valuable professional experiences like capacity of working in a team and communication skills, which are essential for successful careers. In order to foster any business there must be a good co-ordination among the team members and one should be able to make good relations with investors, share holders and sometimes even the competitors. One must be very good at presentation skills, persuading skills and should demonstrate leadership capacity. As I said above, after establishing the online shopping platform, he started negotiating with network security companies and website development companies in order to further improve the business. There is o doubt that, by now, he has learned a lot of professional skills which will continuously help him to move forward and sustain in his business.
In conclusion, I believe that if I had enough capital, I would surely think of a business and invest on it. This is mainly because a business on a long run can generate profits and one can learn a lot of professional skills which are necessary for successful career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...f comfort brought by such assets. In my personal opinion, I can say with utmost confidence that ...
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Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Until” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...country would justify its significance. Until recently we did not have online shoppin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18876404494 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85806124436 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555056179775 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7429139015 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.45 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13107867334 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04037302931 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283301860441 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769367476038 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272221907915 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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