you have long been friends with someone, if they do something that you don't like, should you still be friend with him or her? (66)
People in their life have different possessions but one of the precious assets that they have is their friend. We make a lot of mistakes in the life and some of them affect other people. Some people believe that a friend should be vigilant all the time to do always for their friend's favor and if he did something you do not like you should unravel your friendship tie. I disagree with the idea and I believe we cannot cut friendship in any small challenge.I feel this way because of two main reasons that I am going to explore in the following essay.
first and foremost, we cannot ruin our history with someone because of a mistake. As a matter of fact, friendship is built over a long period of time and diminishing your bond with like-minded friends means that you do not have characteristics of generosity. If you consider him as a friend and forgive him, it would consolidate your friendship tie. As a personal example. one of my best friends named Ahmed who I have known him since I was ten years old, divulged my secret to my girlfriend. I felt embarrassed and angry at the same time. However, after talking with him and understanding that he felt guilty, I forgave him. After that, we are closer to each other.
Secondly, it is hard to substitute a friend with a new person. friends are people's social investment. Admittedly, a considerable amount of time is allocated to grasp whether someone is reliable or not. Removing an individual from our life means that we should make a new investment to find a new reliable person that has the same interest. suppose that you are a manager of a football team and during a game, one of your favorite players makes a mistake and takes a red card from the referee. As a manager, you are in dilemma. whether you should fire him and find a new player in his position or not. Buying a new player means allocating club's budget for a replacement. I think most of the people give another chance to the player. the player and the friend that makes a mistake are the same. we can give a new chance to him
In a nutshell, I adamantly believe that people should not cut their friendship with merely one mistake.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'do'.
Suggestion: always do
...iend should be vigilant all the time to do always for their friends favor and if he did s...
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Suggestion: I
...t cut friendship in any small challenge.I feel this way because of two main reaso...
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Suggestion: First
...ing to explore in the following essay. first and foremost, we cannot ruin our histor...
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Suggestion: period
...f fact, friendship is built over a long period of time and diminishing your bond with like-min...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... would consolidate your friendship tie. As a personal example. one of my best frie...
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... friendship tie. As a personal example. one of my best friends named Ahmed who I ha...
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Suggestion:
...sed and angry at the same time. However, after talking with him and understanding...
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Suggestion: Friends
... substitute a friend with a new person. friends are peoples social investment. Admitted...
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...able person that has the same interest. suppose that you are a manager of a football te...
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...ree. As a manager, you are in dilemma. whether you should fire him and find a new play...
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...ople give another chance to the player. the player and the friend that makes a mist...
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Suggestion: We
...iend that makes a mistake are the same. we can give a new chance to him In a nut...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he same. we can give a new chance to him In a nutshell, I adamantly believe that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, i think, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50510204082 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61658599751 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6453105181 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7826086957 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0434782609 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342408727583 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913298834334 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938095825324 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200628978898 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834406284157 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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