The following appeared as part of an editorial in a weekly newsmagazine:
“Historically, most of this country’s engineers have come from our universities; recently,
however, our university-age population has begun to shrink, and decreasing enrollments
in our high schools clearly show that this drop in numbers will continue throughout the
remainder of the decade. Consequently, our nation will soon be facing a shortage of
trained engineers. If we are to remain economically competitive in the world marketplace,
then we must increase funding for education—and quickly.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc
The author of the prospoal to increase funding for education offers an interesting argument but to move forward on the proposaa requires more information and thought. While the correlation stated are probable, there may be hiddent factors that would prevent the from remainig economically ecompetitive in the world marketplace.
First, the author failed address the exact number of decrease in the population-age university. it is mentioned that the university-age populaion has begun to shrink but if we were to learn that the number of those who are going to the university for the next years decrease by under 1 percent then, there is no such reservation needed to be considered.
Second, the decrease in the of high school enrolment cannot precisely indicate the decrease in the number of those who are going pursue engineering in the country. As a matter of fact, it possible that we have fewer students in the schools but more of them are willing to study engineering in the future meaning that we will not have any shortage in supplying enineering experts in the following years.
Another factor which undermines the argument is that allocating more budget to education cannot necessarily tackle the shortage of engineering in the labor market. Suppose that all the students of the country have enrolled to the high school, then funding education not only cannot increase the number of enrollments but also it would impose irrational expenses on the shoulder of government which cause budget deficit and consequently inflation in the long-term. As a resul, this prospoal is not able to solve the competence problem of the country nor in the long-term, nor in the short-term.
In conclusion, I believe that there are various questions needed to answer before suggesting any policy by the author. The author of the proposal should conduct a elaborating survey to understand the changes in the number of students who tend to study engineering in the futute. Furthermore, the author of the proposal should have exactly mentioned how much the number of secondary students decreases in the fiture.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1731 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.061 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.66 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.423 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.669 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... hiddent factors that would prevent the from remainig economically ecompetitive in t...
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... ecompetitive in the world marketplace. First, the author failed address the exa...
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...ch reservation needed to be considered. Second, the decrease in the of high scho...
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...neering experts in the following years. Another factor which undermines the argu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 342.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17251461988 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89160590323 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514619883041 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8551831924 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.416666667 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 5.70786347227 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130200411751 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461362995038 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031321114433 0.0701772020484 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697424914868 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393517801509 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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