you have long been friends with someone, if they do something that you don't like, should you still be friend with him or her? (after edit)
People in their life have different possessions but one of the precious assets that they have is their friend. We make a lot of mistakes in the life and some of them affect other people. Some people believe that a friend should be vigilant all the time to do always for their friend's favor and if he did something you do not like you should unravel your friendship tie. I disagree with the idea and I believe we cannot cut friendship in any small challenge. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I am going to explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, we cannot ruin our history with someone because of a mistake. As a matter of fact, friendship is built over a long period of time and diminishing your bond with a like-minded friend means that you do not have characteristics of generosity. If you consider him as a friend and forgive him, it would consolidate your friendship tie. As a personal example, one of my best friends named Ahmed who I have known him since I was ten years old divulged my secret to my girlfriend. I felt embarrassed and angry at the same time. However, after talking with him and understanding that he felt guilty, I forgave him. We are closer to each other now.
Secondly, it is hard to substitute a friend with a new person. Friends are people's social investment. Admittedly, a considerable amount of time was allocated to grasp whether someone is reliable or not. Removing an individual from our life means that we should make a new investment to find a new reliable person with the same interest. Without any doubt, it is waste of our resources since we can turn a blind eye to his mistake and give him another chance. Suppose that you are a manager of a football team and during a game, one of your favorite players made a mistake and took a red card from the referee. As a manager, you are in dilemma. Whether you should fire him to find a new player in his position or not. It should be stressed that buying a new player means allocating club's budget for finding a replacement. I think the player deserves another chance not only because it is her first time, but also because he showed her dedication to us before. The player and the friend that makes a mistake are the same. We can give a new chance to him
In a nutshell, I adamantly believe that people should not cut their friendship with merely one mistake.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'do'.
Suggestion: always do
...iend should be vigilant all the time to do always for their friends favor and if he did s...
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Line 2, column 135, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...f fact, friendship is built over a long period of time and diminishing your bond with a like-...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of time and diminishing your bond with a like-minded friend means that you do not...
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Line 3, column 1053, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he same. We can give a new chance to him In a nutshell, I adamantly believe that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, i think, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46666666667 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58793403376 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487356321839 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0644140641 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9583333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352099676308 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942204748587 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874854011942 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208246795177 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829019638327 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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