You recently heard that a library in your neighborhood would be torn down and a gym will be built in its place. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
It is irrefutable that education is an asset for every individuals to enhance their knowledge and lead a better life. Library is the hub of resources that would make an individual intellect. Library plays a major role in making a person autodidactic, that helps people to learn on their own, whenever and wherever they want by lending books to people for a certain period. A library in a locale alone can enrich the intelligence of the man-kind in that region. I am personally in a contrary position and I rigidly oppose the plan. To prove my point, I will give a more scrupulous and cogent analysis and lucid elucidation.
First and foremost, Library is the place where anyone will be able to learn anything without thinking of their financial stability. If a child from a indigent family wants to read a novel, then it would be impossible for him to buy that book as their income would not even be sufficient for their cardinal needs. For instance, If there is a Library in that kid's area, then without thinking of buying the book, he would directly go to the library, read the book in a tranquil environment. Library is the school for children who do not afford to go to educational institutions. For this reason, I do not want the library in my neighbourhood to be destructed.
In addition to that, I would like to add points on why gym should not be given significance when compared to Library. Even though health is as important as education and focusing on fitness would help in living a healthy lifestyle, gym is not the only way for leading healthy lifestyle. We can exercise at home in our lawns, in parks or in our comfortable places. There are other ways to keep up our physical fitness like cycling, yoga, zumba classes etc., Most of the time, Gym will be used by adults and not children. Thus, commute for adults to go to a Gym that is a bit far away is not a big deal whereas children who want to go to Library cannot travel longer alone. This is an additional untrivial point to be taken into account.
To put my view in a nutshell, it will be a tremendous loss for my neighbourhood if the Library is replaced by a gym. As there are more children from impecunious family in our region, education for those kids would only be a dream that could never come to life. In anologous with Library, Gym is a trivial necessity in my neighbourhood as only some of the people from my region are now utilizing the Gym in the nearby area.
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...l necessity in my neighbourhood as only some of the people from my region are now utilizing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, then, thus, whereas, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50786516854 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69710108231 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503370786517 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8666213768 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2212982672 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736704699718 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500553936484 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134839495731 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396448318707 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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