Young adults are the majority part of the society and being as a dominant part that would affect their importance in decision making for entire society. It is commonly argued that Young adults today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Some people believe that they are not part of that influence. While, others argue that they have that influence on society. Personally, In my viewpoint, I disapprove this argument.
In the first place, Young adults plays a crucial role in the different responsibilities that they have taken to be an important part of society where they live. For instance, the military is based on the trust, the strength, and presence of these young people. The entire country is depended from their good job. Even though, old people paved the path for them, it is up to young people to keep up the great job and even try to changed for the better. Because of the very serious involvement in the society, young adults could influence the entire society.
Furthermore, Young people are innovative, they have contributed with new ideas and different creations that really have change our society on the economic development and even civilization. For example, younger generation has developed the usage of advance technology that have change the why people think and solve problems. The laws that are formulated are based on these changes. So, the young generation gives their opinions what it is better for them to change. Consequently, the lifestyle is changed and the decisions that are made have the young adults influence on the core of the change. Therefore, our society is affected from these developments and have created a new path for generations that would come after.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people have an important role in decisions that determine the future of society. These mentioned above are convincing reasons for making me to hold that opinion.
Young adults are the majority part of the society and being as a dominant part that would affect their importance in decision making for entire society. It is commonly argued that Young adults today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Some people believe that they are not part of that influence. While, others argue that they have that influence on society. Personally, In my viewpoint, I disapprove this argument.
In the first place, Young adults plays a crucial role in the different responsibilities that they have taken to be an important part of society where they live. For instance, the military is based on the trust, the strength, and presence of these young people. The entire country is depended from their good job. Even though, old people paved the path for them, it is up to young people to keep up the great job and even try to changed for the better. Because of the very serious involvement in the society, young adults could influence the entire society.
Furthermore, Young people are innovative, they have contributed with new ideas and different creations that really have change our society on the economic development and even civilization. For example, younger generation has developed the usage of advance technology that have change the why people think and solve problems. The laws that are formulated are based on these changes. So, the young generation gives their opinions what it is better for them to change. Consequently, the lifestyle is changed and the decisions that are made have the young adults influence on the core of the change. Therefore, our society is affected from these developments and have created a new path for generations that would come after.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people have an important role in decisions that determine the future of society. These mentioned above are convincing reasons for making me to hold that opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at they are not part of that influence. While, others argue that they have that influ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d with new ideas and different creations that really have change our society on t...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'why'?
Suggestion: why
... of advance technology that have change the why people think and solve problems. The la...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05214723926 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66706987084 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472392638037 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5202281446 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.549594809782 0.236089414692 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172496067706 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189745358902 0.0737576698707 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.363733562977 0.150856017488 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.21239934514 0.0645574589148 329% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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