Young people enjoy life more than older people do
Our times are changing. Nowadays, we are submitted by many stimulates that influence people’s thoughts. Thereby, if we think about the deeper meaning of enjoying life, we can find out some scattered opinions which depend on personal preferences. From my point of view, although some people may say that young people enjoy life more than older adults. It is clear to me that older people are currently living in a different world. Therefore, they can enjoy life better than earlier times. Two reasons convince me that elderly people enjoy life more than younger do.
First of all, our elderly have the opportunity to work less than before, or in some cases, definitely, leave their jobs. It allows them getting more free time for leisure. Hence, they could visit some friends, take a trip to another country or wherever they want. For example, my grandfather and a group of his friends went to Paris, He loved that trip and enjoyed so much. Moreover, he does not concern about bringing up children because He already did it.
Second, if older adults work for a long time, they will save some money for this moment. Therefore, they can do things that they did not before. For instance, someone like playing tennis but he never can afford that, so now with the money he has saved can play tennis and do other things. It is important to realize that money is not all in the world, there are other things more important than money, but it can help you to get a bit of happiness.
Finally, people with more time and money can do things than others do not, and for these reasons think that older people have some advantages in contrast to younger people. However, I want to point out that there are other variables instead of time and money that can help to reach a pleasant life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...can help you to get a bit of happiness. Finally, people with more time and money...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67619047619 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27947561301 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9814770828 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8333333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393372169284 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127453063413 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15857322192 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248541997474 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.204455684174 0.0645574589148 317% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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