Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Human beings encounter three different stages in their lifespan. These stages are childhood, adulthood and old age. The two last stages play crucial roles in human’ life. This brings up a controversial question: Do old people feel more enjoyable than young ones. Some people are inclined toward that old people are satisfied with life, whereas other have opposite point of view, believing that the life is more pleasant for juveniles. As far as I’m concerned, I contend that adolescent enjoy their life more than old subjects because of the following reasons that I will discuss them.
To begin with, young people enjoy their life better that older one because they are healthy than old people. In fact, young people are physically healthier. They do not have chronic and acute disease such high blood pressure or heart ailments which are more widespread amount old people. However, individuals who are old are exposed to many various ailments such as diabetes, heart attacks and so forth. Not only that, but also diseases related to bones and muscles are more common among elderly men and women. Although it depends on people's lifestyle who eat healthy foods will be less exposure to that kind of disease, adult also could get such diseases unless they regard to food ingredients. Therefore, because young adult do not get the aftermentioned ailments, they enjoy their life more desirable that old subjects.
The second reason that support my viewpoint is that young adults are able to explore the world better than old ones. In fact, as previously I mentioned, old subjects confront with several diseases which restrict from spending time on enjoyment, because doctors advise them to stay at home or not travel to places that cause them to worsen their aliments. When an old person, consider your grandfather, has a pain in his feet, he will not able to visit areas that required to walk such as visiting natural places. Your grandfather could not go to museums and galleries or national parks to observe local animals at a trip to foreign countries. Moreover, aged individuals have limitation to eat foods. Indeed, if they like to have a domestic meals, they should restrain or even deprive themselves from eating food in their journey to other nations, because their personal doctors prohibit them from eating fatty and sugary foods. On the other hand, young adults not only have strong passion to explore new places, but also they are healthier than old individuals. As a result of this, juveniles will have pleasant time because of having ability to travel various places without difficulty.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned reasons, I would say that individuals who are young enough are happier than elderly people. The reasons behind this standpoint are that they are healthier and they are able to explore world around them better. Is old age easier to people to take a trip while s/he has ailments?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05360824742 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50333054799 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534020618557 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0807680985 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.125 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2083333333 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314865080372 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097899116474 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123780807034 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21665824862 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141583265045 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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