Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
The entertainments have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to consume our time by engaging in a verity of activities that assist us to improve our mental health by getting rid of the built up a tension of our stressful lives. However, nowadays, the new ways to enjoy the days are by the new technological development and innovations such as the smartphones or computers, besides, the internet in which all people and especially the children are obsessed to be up to date with them. Therefore, I believe that the kids have more fun in this life more than the past generation due to their abilities to improve their education and their social skills by using the advanced implements. The following explanations go as follows.
To begin with, The internet has an imperative role in providing a myriad amount of information in an easy and affordable way because it has a spectacular breakthrough many spheres and facilitates our life. Indeed, this large web net assists the students to gain a high knowledge in a short period of time rather than the stress of searching for books to finish their tasks. For instance, I used to browse for all the basic and fundamental data that I really need to be familiar to conduct a research by using the internet because that helped me to have all what I wanted to learn in an effective way, in addition, I could use my email to send what I found directly to my peers, so, we enjoyed studying and preparing for our researches together. In contrast, the former generations did not have these facilities, and they were vulnerable to a wide range of obstacles such as not enough time and no sufficient resources, thus, they suffered a lot. Consequently, the modern life endows the young generation many ways that assist them to enjoy their lives even when they are studying.
Second, social skills have an indelible role in guiding us to fulfill our goals and enhance our future workflow. In fact, these abilities can be improved by interacting and communicating with people from different areas, thus, in the present, people can create a vast array of new relationships by employing the new innovations such as the audio and video calls that surge them to contact their relatives and friends in their leisure time. For example, I have a wide range of friends from different cultures, I met them online by using social pages and applications, moreover, they taught me how to deal effectively with people from different communities and how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively. So, such a collaborative environment enhanced my communication skills immensely which a had a great influence on my future work productivity. On the other hand, my grandparents could not have the same skills because it was arduous for them to contact easily with people, hence, they would not instill the concrete basis of the interpersonal skills as the new generations. In conclusion, young people enjoy their life more than the older ones because they can improve their social abilities in accessible ways.
Last but not least, kids get enough fun and joyful more than their former parents due to the accessible and affordable guides to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'high knowledge'.
Suggestion: high knowledge
...ge web net assists the students to gain a high knowledge in a short period of time rather than t...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...nts to gain a high knowledge in a short period of time rather than the stress of searching for...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...I really need to be familiar to conduct a research by using the internet because that help...
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Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...d me to have all what I wanted to learn in an effective way, in addition, I could use my email to s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91391941392 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88694945979 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501831501832 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.3536261336 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.823529412 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1176470588 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9411764706 5.45110844103 237% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203713260749 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647898559158 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951119445338 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124665340708 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373096332082 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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