young people hold celebrities opinions in higher regard or old people
The definitive role of a celebrity in a society and its impact of the youth of that society depends to a great extent on the social and cultural attributes of a community. While some may argue that young people are more fascinated by celebrities and therefore, more influnced by them, others might present a contrasting view that older people can be more prone to be effected by famous people due to their independence. I agree with the former, and I believe the impact of celebrities' ideas can be more considerable on young generations, I will demonstrate further as follows.
First, young people have a more suggestable mind which is still developing and shaping. In contrast, when a person gets older, they usually have specific and fully formed thought patterns. Fully-fledged idealogies are often present in older population, whereas youngsters can be referred to as the more open minded-group.Thus, considering these attributes, people with younger age possibly regard the opinions of famous people very influential. They are still learning the ways of life, and who is better to learn from that a famous successful person. For instance, I have a 14 years old cousin who cuts her hair and talks constantly about a career as a dancer and a singer, because she is currently infatuated with a music group called BTS, and she is trying to be similar to them.
Secondly, as young people are more enthusiastic and have less worries about their responsibilities, they are the perfect target group for advertisements from entertainment companies. While some adults may free up time to watch programs, movies, music videos, and sports, this cannot be regarded as a generalized occurrence since innumerable populations and older age groups would not probably have the time to do so. Focusing on careers, educational purposes, raising a family, social roles. and other responsibilities of an adult are so time consuming that little time would be left to watch and be influenced by celebrities. Companies producing these programs are aware of the fact, and in my opinion, they make their productions more appealing to the younger generations. As an example, referring to the same cousin I mentioned earlier, she and most of her highschool friends, find the same kind of interests in movies and music videos which really excites them. It is as though the celebrities have cast a spell on them. In contrast, when I watch the same programs, I do not understand the appeal, and I will most likely forget the name of the celebrity shortly afterwards.
In conclusion, as young people's minds are more suggestable, and they are more likely to be fascinated by celebrities, I believe the youth holds the opinions of celebrities in higher regard.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, in my opinion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06194690265 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04517376327 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515486725664 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2771334219 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.588235294 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5882352941 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2352941176 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280158979776 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834084350177 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104010688365 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215161609813 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110072204084 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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