Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
One of current affairs that people are face with is going to university because we live in technology era and it is better that everyone get a lot of information through going university. Thereby, selecting a major and how long does it takes to get this major are the most important parts of studying in universities. Some people may hold the opinion that studying for a long time to learn a subject in very little details are good but others think that studying a major for a short time is a better choice. If you ask me which one do you prefer, I would rather select the opinion of the second group. In order to substantiate my vantage point, I would like to address some key evidences; a major that would allow people to finish it sooner would preserve motivation of students through studying, and also; it would be better for individuals to get expert by doing a job not through studying.
First and foremost, if students get a degree of a major in a short time, they would be motivated during studying. I think that studying a major for a long time led to students lost their enthusiasm. For example, my friend Mahdi was very happy that his studying period is short so he tried to concentrate on his major. As a result, he both got high marks in this period and also was very eager to learn materials well.
Along with the same line, another privilege of the aforementioned idea; if individuals study a major for a long time to learn every details by studying, they would not apply most of their knowledge when they work. Because most of knowledge that people obtain by means of studying are not applicable to problems which happen during working so individual choose to try many solutions that are appropriate for obstacles. Thus, time would be saved by studying for a short time. For instance, my brother studied his major for a year and after that he found a job. When there was a problem, he applied many solutions. After a while he got prominent in the office he worked for, so when his colleagues faced an obstacle, they asked my brother for guidance even individuals studies for many years.
To put the issue into the perspective, by taking account into these entire aspects; studying for a major that need a short time make individuals to be happy during their study and also save their time and the could be successful in their work by working not studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take'?
Suggestion: take
... selecting a major and how long does it takes to get this major are the most importan...
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Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: take
... selecting a major and how long does it takes to get this major are the most importan...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58450704225 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54116953294 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471830985915 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5216888181 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0625 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273756140505 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106568005699 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585545320813 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177522729122 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867834515983 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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