Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
o A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
o A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our contemporary epoch that they are lots of people searching for job positions with a high salary, it is very important to become more professional and educated for becoming successful in this marathon. I personally assert that if a person wants to be someone for whom most of the companies searching, she or he should provide something more than everybody have; for instance a high degree with years of studying and searching in that area of him or her subject. I will expand on my asserts in the following paragraphs.
My first and foremost reason is that with many years of sufficient educations people could gain lots of ability and skills which will provide them lots of occupations in the future. At first, if a guy invests in professional skills and works very hard on them throughout years of education, he will become highly successful. Statistics show that most of the times companies show enthusiastic hiring skillful people with long terms of study that make them radically sufficient. Therefore, longed education not only provides such a valuable experience but also it will be very workable for our future career too.
My latter assert is that most of the firms hiring an employee with high incomes only if they have gained abundant experiences for many years by the means of education. Let me clarify my notion with one of my personal examples; about ten years ago I was going to find a sufficient job that provided me plentiful payment. When I started searching, the more I searched the more I became frustrated due to the fact that companies wanted employees with a bunch of educational knowledge that she gained with years of studying; once they found her they had paid her the highest income. Hence, I started to study hard, after years when I become educated and accomplished; I could find my dream occupation with the highest income.
To make a long story short, not only do not years of education squander time but also it will be very beneficial in the near future. From my personal experience, if we expect high income, we should work hard and obtain lots of knowledge in our major. Therefore, it is highly suggested that a guy become a real trained person in his or her field of learning. At the end who seeks shall find.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75510204082 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67185260351 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507653061224 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.243800972 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.266666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767140140485 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284080421399 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.020519373488 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.050332845958 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00972144393658 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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