Your friends have the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
• A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly).
• A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
In today's modern and sophisticated world, choosing a major of study plays a vital role in student's success. In this connection, each learner has a distinctive priority when wants to select a field of study. Although some people believe that it is beneficial for learners to study in the field, which helps them to get a degree quickly, such an issue is not regarded as positive and constructive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that it can be a plus for students to study in the major which provides an enjoyable job offer in the future, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, the central purpose of education is to find a satisfying job after graduation; thus, people should consider the field which fulfills this demand. To be more specific, when students decide to become an educated person, they should spend a considerable amount of their time to study, thereby experiencing limited leisure time. As a result, they want to find a career to compensate for the years when they allocate to study. According to my own experience, when I decided to choose my major, I enrolled in one which had fewer courses to graduate early and find a full-time career. After graduation, I could not find a suitable job as I studied in a low employment rate field in my country, leading to hopeless feelings since I thought that I dissipated all the years which I dedicated to reading lessons.
Second, when pupils spend a wealth of time in an educational environment, they have an ideal opportunity to gain valuable information; moreover, they can find more links to find a job. To elucidate, many professors monitor students' performance during education, thereby hiring knowledgable one who passes impressive courses after finishing their requirements which pertained to society's needs. For example, my sister registered in many classes at university because she wanted to improve her knowledge. Accordingly, she was well-known, so much so that professors offered her vacancies as many of them had links in the industry; thus, she found a job immediately after finishing education and have become a thriving person.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is helpful for students to learn subjects with a high employment rate and more job vacancies. Not only does it seem time-wasting if learners cannot apply for a career, but pupils also become familiar with many tutors and boost their knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... many tutors and boost their knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0313253012 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89702697226 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551807228916 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.4963918637 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.2 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14746792623 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518099982558 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471765817269 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863899496136 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621776749794 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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