If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer
I live in a city where the rate of unemployment is incredibly high at an alarming pace. If one day I have a chance to change a vitally important thing about my hometown, I definitely decrease the rate of unemployment. I will support my opinion in the following text.
It is an inescapable fact that when the number of unemployed people is large in a city, beyond a shadow of doubt crime rate is huge. For example, I hear the news of murder and theft that happened in my hometown. It really has made me upset and I always told myself that I hope to be able to do something about it. I think if the number of workless people will be decreased, people would be able to provide their essential needs. Hence, certainly the number of offenders will be reduced.
By building factories in a city, the amount of unemployment will be declined to a significant extent. Even though, factories pollute the air but when there is less number of unemployed individuals in an area. In a factory people with different field of studies are required. For instance, in my hometown there are many students with different backgrounds and they could not find a job. Moreover, they are forced to immigrate to another cities and live far from their families that wastes a lot of time and money.
There are many poor people in my hometown and because of not having enough money they do not want to continue their education. Accordingly, it is hard for my hometown to success. In my view, expanding knowledge is a key factor for improving a city in different aspects such as we do not have a suitable tourist destination. Furthermore, we do not have this opportunity to absorb many tourists from other parts of the world and improve our financial situations.
On the whole, reducing the rate of unemployment in our hometown is definitely the most important and vital thing to do if I could have a chance or power to do so. This change benefit everybody in my hometown to have a better place to live in.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, really, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my view, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5702247191 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75626216571 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511235955056 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.247141212 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6315789474 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105948980759 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353343912715 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533879018778 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738325251186 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585931991267 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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