Your school has received a gift of money. What do you think is the best way for your school to spend this money? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
It is critically vital that the school will never advance if they do not improve their policy or courses, which is essential for all teachers and workers in the school to notice and come up with solutions to adjust if there is any new budget they have received. In my opinion, if the school has received a gift of money, they shall make suitable use of opening a course focusing on the students' manners instead of only on their school work. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following statement.
To begin with, it is noticeable that scholars in the twenty century reversed their target to a single goal of attending higher ranking universities and getting rid of the most critical part of children's development. Manners are the most vital, yet fewer people consider them necessary enough for schools to exploit the money on planning a course and hiring several teachers to teach those youngsters. For instance, students mostly put their full effort into their studies, and they account that receiving high grades in the entrance examinations and attending world-famous universities is their ultimate goal in life, and an acceptable manner will not increase their grades which is unnecessary.
In addition, there is no doubt that a person who contains suitable personal traits has more advantages on observing jobs or finishing their work assignments. People who can cooperate with their teammates will lead to more efficient and effective teamwork and complete the task more quickly, which increases the weight of the course of manners and the school shall remove part of the incomes on. By the way of illustration, no matter whether our teammates are our classmates or co-workers, it is clear that we shall cultivate the personal trait that people are willing to work with us.
Last on the contrary not least, there is no denying that possessing appropriate manners is the only method that brings about a more healthy and successful life. People have a lesser opportunity of getting furious or anxious while hardships occur, and they can exploit a more optimistic and mentally healthy angle to face the plight, instead of complaining about their environment or resources, which opening a course about this will change the young adults' aspects. To cite an instance, someone chooses to give up in distress, yet someone chooses to rise in difficulties, which means that the suitable manners learned from schools will bring about more positive thinking of the young.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if the school is going to exploit the gift of money to adjust its policy or strategy, it is extremely vital that the school shall plan a class that focuses on correcting or adjusting the pupils' manners, which will not only influence the undergraduates' future careers and their mental and physical health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, by the way, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05296610169 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66687977564 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506355932203 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8015726546 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.461538462 100.406767564 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.3076923077 20.6045352989 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134443951502 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562241921875 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562741347133 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872818301942 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648406476098 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 11.7677419355 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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