Question: Your school has received a gift of money. What do you think is the best way for your school to spend this money? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
There is no doubt in that schools play a pivotal role in the education of the students. As schools are the first educational Institutions where students learn both academic and social skills . If my school ever attain a gift of money, I feel it will be better for the school to spend that money on building sports complex and library facility. I will explain reasons for my perspective in the following paragraphs.
First of all, Sports activities should be considered an important aspect for student education. Undoubtedly, Schools are meant for academic education, but sports are also essential for the students as academic education. To be more specific, without Sports Students would not be able to learn social skills which includes team work, respect others opinions, temperament and perform under pressure. Therefore, it is the fundamental responsibility of schools to provide the students play grounds where students can practice all these social skills and when they come to practical fields they already know all these skills to become successful in life. I would like to demonstrate my own School example to illustrate my point of view. I remember our School was granted with money from the government. The administration of our School had decided to utilize that money in building sports complex. Our school had built the best sports complex in the city. It include sections for different play grounds, So, all the students had enjoyed their favorite sports. I used to play soccer each day with my classmates. We used to play with other classes where we have to deal with a pressure every day. During the course of these matches, I had learned a lot of social skill, which help me a lot in my practical Field. Hence, it is proved that Schools should considered sports seriously and spend money on sports to facilitate their students.
On top of that, School can use allotted money on building library. School should considered libraries as an important part of their institutions. To explain broadly, without libraries school would not be considered educational Institution. If the school would have library the chances are more likely that school will provide a plethora of scholars and competent people in all the fields. Likewise, if schools do not have libraries student coming out from these school will be lacking in competency. I will like to elaborate my perspective by mentioning my example of my own school. I used to study in Army public School. Our school lacked library facility, because of that I never had a habit of reading books. When I come to practical field, I had to pass the TOEFL English language exam which required high marks in reading. As I had never developed a habit of reading book I find it hard to pass that exam. If our school had a library , I would have developed a habit of reading book and had Pass TOEFL reading easily. Therefore, due to this fact I consider that Schools should have libraries to enlighten their Students so they can develop habit of reading.
In summation, from the above mentioned discussion, When It comes to spending school should considered Sports and libraries their top priority. Because both these facilities are integral part of students education. As sports are pivotal for the students for learning social skills, and libraries play their role by developing reading habits to the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, likewise, so, therefore, i feel, no doubt, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2820.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00888099467 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70492628441 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424511545293 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2839703873 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.125 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.59375 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188056854742 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065761604939 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054168783636 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138995277395 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536379211316 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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