Nowadays, education has become the top concern of modern citizens. Recently, there is a heated debate on university's investment to improve students' life quality, some claim that universities should spend money on studying rooms or fitting rooms. As for me, I believe that they should spend money on providing an entertainment place, especially considering the benefits to people's health and interpersonal relationships.
Firstly, building an amusement room will help students to have a healthy lifestyle. To be specific, students are very stressed out these days, and having a room like that can provide them with a place to take a break from school assignments, which can help them have mental relaxation. My friend Mike is a compelling illustration of this. Mike spends at least 10 hours a day at school attending class, preparing for exams, and doing group work, which makes him exhausted every day. After returning to the dormitory, he just wants to have some fun, like watching movies, playing video games with friends, and going for a walk. If we have a recreation room in the dorm, we will definitely have a better mental condition and re-engage in our studies; however, if the university invests in studying rooms, we cannot have this kind of leisure time. In addition, students can study at the library, which is more suitable for studying. There is no need to build a room for studying in our dorm. Thus, I am convinced that the university should provide an entertainment room.
Furthermore, if the playroom is built, students can also have the opportunity to improve their interpersonal skills by making good friends in it. To be exact, people can easily find someone with the same interests, such as adoring the same sports, celebrities, films, and books. For instance, places like that will provide students with a chance to expand their friend circle, it also gives some shy people an opportunity to take the first step to making some friends. As I know, the college next door builds amusement rooms in students' dorms, which greatly enhance students' social abilities. A student who used to be afraid of talking with others sends a think letter to the office because this helps him to make his first friend in his life. On the other hand, how could students have chances to meet new people and improve their interpersonal relationships, if the university chooses exercise rooms.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I still maintain that the university should spend money providing an entertainment place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... be afraid of talking with others sends a think letter to the office because this helps...
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Line 5, column 888, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to exercise'
Suggestion: to exercise
...elationships, if the university chooses exercise rooms.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, as for, at least, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03015075377 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75552890971 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577889447236 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.640435529 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.222222222 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339480971271 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10953107746 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830589354371 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242358365881 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511899193672 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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