Altruism
The passage and the lecture both addresses the question if altruism which is a unselfish act benefit the individual or not. While the author of the passage feels these individuals do not gain anything, the lecture feels otherwise. Both the lecture and author defend their points by taking examples of altruistic mammals like meerkat and humans which is elaborated in the below essay.
To begin with, the author describes how in a group of meerkats, an individual sentinel acts as a standing guard and checks if any predator is coming while the other meerkats hunt and search for food. The author emphasized on the fact that by doing this , the meerkat gets nothing and it goes back without food.But the lecture contradicts by saying that the sentinel meerkat first eats and makes itself comfortable, only then it acts as a standing guard to safeguard others.
Secondly the author claims that when a meerkat sees any predator coming it gives an alarm. While all the other meerkats get together and have high chances to chase the predator the sentinel meerkat is left back placing its life in danger. The lecture refutes this by saying that since the sentinel meerkat stays near the burrows, it escapes inside it immediately after giving the alarm. Also since the other meerkats gets scattered or come together the predator has higher chance of noticing them and hence their lives are at stake.
Finally, the author posits by saying there are altruistic human beings as well who donate their body organs without expecting back anything in return, The lecture claims that by doing these things though the individual does not receive any materialistic returns he gets compliments and appreciation by donor and everyone in the society. According to the lecture this sense of self worth is better than monetary benefi
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 303.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00660066007 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4375488311 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547854785479 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.6791484058 49.2860985944 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.909090909 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0319313716389 0.272083759551 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190686723889 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603004367046 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0232551332014 0.162205337803 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402790722417 0.0443174109184 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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