Altruism is a behavior where a person or an animal sacrifices their interest over the others. While the passage states that animals and human do sacrifice their interest for helping out the other animal or person respectively but the lecturer disagrees with that by stating a research.
Over the passage, it says when a human donates foods to strangers or when a human donates their organ for a family member or even to a stranger, they get little reward in return for performing such an altruist act. Whereas the lecturer states otherwise, she states that when a human donates an organ to their family member or a stranger, donor gets appreciation from community and self-worth which in turn is more of a non-material reward for them. Similarly, when a person donates food to a stranger, they get praises which makes it a selfish act.
Passage says that a group of animals that is meerkats, in Africa is cited as an example for selfless act where a meerkat, an individual will act as a sentinel, standing guard and looking for predators while others hunt for food or while eating food the group has obtained. When a predator approaches, for example, a hawk, the guard alerts other meerkats and they run for their life while the other acts as a distraction and tries to flee alone. But, in lecture, the lecturer says that meerkat does exactly opposite of what is expected. The guard eats the gathered food first and then stands for guard next to a burrow. While standing guard, if a predator approaches, it gives an alarm cry which could either used to bring together a group or separate them, the guard meerkat could use it to save himself. Not only it could misuse the alarm but it would also shirk the predator by directly escaping through the burrow which in turn could risk lives of the other meerkats.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...lecturer disagrees with that by stating a research. Over the passage, it says when a hu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, similarly, so, then, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7106918239 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4809228216 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4991769077 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.181818182 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256890642373 0.272083759551 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103182259004 0.0996497079465 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856508918673 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177778208096 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671881103823 0.0443174109184 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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