Animal-assisted therapy is beneficial. TOEFL integrated essay

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Animal-assisted therapy is beneficial. TOEFL integrated essay

The author asserts that animal-assisted therapy is utilized to enhance emotional and physical health, similarly the speaker tells us about the research that showed positive effects of pet ownership on heart health.
The author explains that how pets enhance both emotional and physical health. Pets are well-known as source of emotional support. They are convenient partner for lonely people. Also, people can become friend with pets easily because they have good manner. In addition, pets give their owner opportunity for entertainments. Pets get comforts to their owner to relieve from emotional stress or worried. Pet are good for physical health, as well. People who have high blood can improve their treatment by petting and talking to pets. Doing physical activity is another opportunity that is provided by pets. Also, they give a people chance to play. People who care pets are less require to go to doctor than non-pet owner. Finally, pet therapy is used with elderly people.
The speaker supports pet therapy. she relates a study that pets bring about positive effect on health of heart patients. Half of patient took care of a dog (had to take care of) that included spend two hours a day caring for the pet. The other group of patient got traditional treatment which contained drug and physical therapy and dietary recommendation. After six months, the patients with dogs had lower blood pressure and they lost their weight than other patient. They also felt happier and less stressed. Finally, the majority of pet caretakers want to keep dog after the study. This study showed how pet therapy can improve physical health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 413, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...motional stress or worried. Pet are good for physical health, as well. People who...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'similarly', 'so', 'well', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272727272727 0.261695866417 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.171717171717 0.158904122519 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114478114478 0.0723426182421 158% => OK
Adverbs: 0.043771043771 0.0435111971325 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.037037037037 0.0277247811725 134% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10101010101 0.128828473217 78% => OK
Participles: 0.030303030303 0.0370669169778 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47753045631 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030303030303 0.0208969081088 145% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0606060606061 0.128158765124 47% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010101010101 0.0158828679856 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.026936026936 0.0114777025283 235% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1636.0 1645.83664459 99% => OK
No of words: 268.0 271.125827815 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10447761194 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384328358209 0.374372842146 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.30223880597 0.287516216867 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171641791045 0.187439937562 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0783582089552 0.113142543107 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47753045631 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.539623497131 102% => OK
Word variations: 55.3932496735 53.8517498576 103% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0529801325 161% => OK
Sentence length: 12.7619047619 21.7502111507 59% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8700958803 49.3711431718 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9047619048 132.220823453 59% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.7619047619 21.7502111507 59% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.285714285714 0.878197800319 33% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 42.9857853589 50.5018328374 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.6 1.90840788429 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0735375625317 0.549887131256 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109022169895 0.142949733639 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0953070462852 0.0787303798458 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.396752661899 0.631733273073 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159529488994 0.139662658121 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273528488567 0.266732575781 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473714377158 0.103435571967 46% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.220656924395 0.414875509568 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0286590692289 0.0530846634433 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069325667757 0.40443939384 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421154871362 0.0528353158467 80% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 4.33554083885 392% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Not in a correct format.

The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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