Brochs
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in the functions of brochs. To begin with, the reading says that the brochs are built for defensive purpose because they are tall and thick. However, the listening argues that defensive forts often have some opening, such as window, so people can shoot arrows and to keep enemies in distances. Otherwise, their enemies can easily break down the doors or set the house on fire when they are close to the house. In other words, since these brochs do not have open windows, it is unlikely that they are built for defensive purpose.
In addition, the reading suggests that brochs are used to store grains or food inside. Whereas, the listening asserts that this is unlikely to be true. Researchers had found some water tanks and fire places inside the brochs. Water tanks can create a humid condition which is not going to keep the grains fresh. Besides, it is extremely easy to set on fire when the dusts of grains gather. Therefore, the evidence of fireplace are not an evidence to such grain storage.
Last but not least, while the reading implies that brochs are built for the leaders and chieftains to live, while the listening indicates that is explanation is incorrect. These brochs are located isolated, it is impossible for these leaders to build their house at an isolated place. To say it differently, leaders usually live with a groups of people, because the purpose of the leaders is to govern their residents. Moreover, there are many brochs located at a same place. It is unlikely that there are several leaders live together and govern the sane area.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re used to store grains or food inside. Whereas, the listening asserts that this is unl...
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Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a group' or simply 'groups'?
Suggestion: a group; groups
... differently, leaders usually live with a groups of people, because the purpose of the l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, in addition, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1351.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84229390681 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34811618518 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512544802867 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0138577897 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4375 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223078295218 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785052935331 0.0996497079465 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104187164509 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145986999622 0.162205337803 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517552395546 0.0443174109184 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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