Some people argue that using clean energy(such as solar power or wind power) to protect the environment is a better idea even though the cost is higher, but some people say the traditional energy source such as coal and oil are less expensive. What is your suggestion?
In modern life, having energy is always a important thing in our daily life. We use it for all sorts of things, such as powering up machines or driving cars all require the use of energy. Some people may say that it is better to use traditional energy sources such as coal or gas, while others implies that we should use clean energy such as solar power or wind power even though it is more expensive. In my opinion, I prefer the latter option.
To begin with, using clean energy can protect our environment. When we are using these energy such as solar panels or wind power, it will not cause any carbon dioxide. For example, in my country, there is a kind of scooter name Gogolo. The different thing between Gogolo and the normal kind of scooter is that Gogolo does not use gas be their energy, it use electricity instead. Therefore, the only thing we need to do is just charge the battery every time when we use all of the energy. As a result, since it use electricity to run, it will not produce any carbon dioxide that can cause harmful effects to the environment. Even though this scooter is more expensive than the normal kind, many people still by it because it can provide us a better environment. Indeed, I think people should use clean energy even though it is costly, because it is extremely beneficial for our environment.
In addition, using too many traditional resources can cause extinction of animals. To be more concise, population had start increase in recent decades, so people are trying to discover more energy. If they use traditional energy, since it is over located outside of the city like mountains or forests, it will cause lots of deforestation. When this happen, it will destroy animals habitat and lead to extinction. For example, gasoline are always located under the ground, so in order to pump it out, people often bring many other machines to help. However, since these machines are usually heavy, people need transportations and roads to transportive them, so we often cut down many trees and during this process, we destroy many natural habitat for some species of birds or insects. It might cause extinction on them because they do not have a place to live. Moreover, when these species die, more extinction will occur because other animals cannot find enough food sources. After a long time, all of the animals will die because their habitat were destroyed. Can human still survive if all of the other animals were extinct? On the other hand, if we use clean energy, it only require to build some solar panel on the roof or some wind turbine. Therefore, the building process will not cause any harm to the animals. As a result, it is far more effective to se clean energy than using traditional energy.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that it is better to use traditional energy sources such as coal or gas because it is cheaper. However, there is only on Earth, we really need to protect it so we can have a place to live. Moreover, if we destroy the Earth, there is no place for us to spend the money we save. Therefore, I strongly agree that we should use clean energy such as solar power or wind power to protect the environment even though it is more expensive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...In modern life, having energy is always a important thing in our daily life. We u...
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Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this energy' or 'these energies'?
Suggestion: this energy; these energies
...tect our environment. When we are using these energy such as solar panels or wind power, it ...
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Line 2, column 354, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'uses'?
Suggestion: uses
...lo does not use gas be their energy, it use electricity instead. Therefore, the onl...
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Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...arge the battery every time when we use all of the energy. As a result, since it use elect...
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Line 3, column 995, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...enough food sources. After a long time, all of the animals will die because their habitat ...
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Line 3, column 1088, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e destroyed. Can human still survive if all of the other animals were extinct? On the othe...
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Line 3, column 1178, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'requires'?
Suggestion: requires
...r hand, if we use clean energy, it only require to build some solar panel on the roof o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2643.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 571.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62872154116 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45778238836 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404553415061 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 873.9 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 15.0 3.51792114695 426% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1831688995 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1379310345 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6896551724 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13793103448 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340213597946 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994019173166 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144569537059 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282856130325 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129755770611 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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