The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom

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The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Roman history. However, because Claudius suffered from physical handicaps and spoke with a stutter, ancient authors were biased against him. Consequently, their descriptions of his time in power are almost uniformly hostile, and many ancient historians ignore all of the good that he did.
Claudius’s reign was important for its major innovations. He conquered the island of Britain and incorporated it into the Roman Empire. He also built a new harbor for Rome and oversaw the construction of several new aqueducts, which brought clean water into the city. He even created laws to protect the rights of slaves and expand Roman citizenship to new people. All of these facts suggest that he was a gifted ruler with strong judgment, despite what may be found in histories written by his detractors.
Another reason for the hostility of ancient authors toward the reign of Claudius has to do with the fact that the writers were usually of senatorial class. Claudius was not elected to power by the Senate and severely limited its traditional powers during his reign. However, illustrating his wisdom, instead of entrusting high bureaucratic positions to senators, he preferred to give them to trustworthy slaves and former slaves (freedmen), whom he felt were more loyal to him. They worked efficiently, creating a bureaucratic framework for all future emperors. Claudius should be praised for giving political opportunities to new groups of people such as former slaves and even the women of the imperial household, including his wives.

Between 41 and 54 CE, the emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire. According to reading, he was most innovative, fair, and wise in all Roman History. But in listening professor does not agree with all the points. He gave some examples and put a doubt on the reading section.
According to reading, Claudius was wise but a professor made a point that he read a novel and according to that he betrayed the strongest. He was responsible for civil war. According to reading, Claudius created law for slaves which were beneficial to them and due to his strong judgment he was considered as gifted ruler. But in a listening section, it stated that he was a bad judge. he judged many cases even without listening. He was a violent game lover.
According to a reading, In Claudius wisdom, he gave most of the positions to slave and to former slaves to whom he felt were more loyal to him. And it is also mentioned that he should be praised forgiving political opportunities to new groups of people such as former slaves and even the women of the imperial household, including his wives. But as per lecture wives were disloyal. His Last wife poisoned him and his Son was the worst ruler ever in history. These are the points cast doubts on reading.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 386, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ion, it stated that he was a bad judge. he judged many cases even without listenin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, as for, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 223.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57399103139 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54206699498 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57399103139 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0833305037 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.0 110.228320801 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26666666667 7.06452816374 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198101314484 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797267868182 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100516979829 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168430201214 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110644390369 0.0443174109184 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.3589403974 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 53.8541721854 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.0289183223 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.63 12.2367328918 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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