The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Roman history. However, because Claudius suffered from physical handicaps and spoke with a stutter, ancient authors were biased against him. Consequently, their descriptions of his time in power are almost uniformly hostile, and many ancient historians ignore all of the good that he did.
Claudius’s reign was important for its major innovations. He conquered the island of Britain and incorporated it into the Roman Empire. He also built a new harbor for Rome and oversaw the construction of several new aqueducts, which brought clean water into the city. He even created laws to protect the rights of slaves and expand Roman citizenship to new people. All of these facts suggest that he was a gifted ruler with strong judgment, despite what may be found in histories written by his detractors.
Another reason for the hostility of ancient authors toward the reign of Claudius has to do with the fact that the writers were usually of senatorial class. Claudius was not elected to power by the Senate and severely limited its traditional powers during his reign. However, illustrating his wisdom, instead of entrusting high bureaucratic positions to senators, he preferred to give them to trustworthy slaves and former slaves (freedmen), whom he felt were more loyal to him. They worked efficiently, creating a bureaucratic framework for all future emperors. Claudius should be praised for giving political opportunities to new groups of people such as former slaves and even the women of the imperial household, including his wives.
The text and the lecture has some similar points of viwes about the emperor Claudius of Rome. While, the text says that Claudius should be praised for the work he did while he was the ruler, the professor in the lecture counters the specific points and supports the difficulties that caused during his ruling.
First, the professor refutes the idea that is mentioned in the text as the Claudius hostility is just because of his physical handicap and stutter. He states that Claudius is mentioned as a viscious fool and he questions his was of ruling "Was he a fair ruler?". Though he might be innovative by devoleping the empire, the professor states that he is not a good ruler. Professor states that he was belligerent ruler always prone to violent actions and fascinated by the violent situations which lead to the civil war in later years. In the text, it mentions that Claudius protected the slaves but professor states that he tortured them by making them fight with each other in the competitions he enjoyed watching.
Secondly, The professor also mentions in his lecture that Claudius lacked loyalty to his fellow members, although the text mentions that he was loyal to the slaves he freed but not the senators. The professor aslo makes a point that he was cruel to his wives, which resulted in one of the wife poisoned him. Which eventually led to his son who is the worst ruler for roman of all time. Due to his bad decisions made by Claudius as mentioned in the lecture people hated him more not just beause of his physical handicap and stutter as the text puts it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71326164875 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48885957071 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.0 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2929570363 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.545454545 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3636363636 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12440085226 0.272083759551 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608437316491 0.0996497079465 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350655690616 0.0662205650399 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987996101006 0.162205337803 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184296506867 0.0443174109184 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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