Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass window

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Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows. There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.
One-Way Glass
One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.
Colorful Designs
A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass. Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.
Magnetic Field
The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions—either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth's magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building

The lecture presents three viewpoints on the issue of ways that used to prevent injuries to birds, challenging ideas as stated in the reading passage.
Primarily, the lecture holds the opinion that the one-way glass can reflect like a mirror, which is bad for the birds. He illustrates the opinion by stating that birds can not understand mirror and as the result they may hit the glass and become injuries.This point is obviously opposite to what is presented in the reading passage, since it claims that one-way glass is able to form the barrier to prevent from going through.
Additionally, the lecturer points that the painting on the glass can not prevent birds from flying through the glass. As the lecturer claims, if the painting covers the whole glass, the light can not go through and the rooms inside are dark. when the designers leave some holes of paintings, the bird may try to fly through the holes and finally hit the glass. In the reading passage, however, it says colorful designs could avoid birds trying to fly through the glass.
Finally,contrary to the belief in the passage that magnetic field can guide birds away from the glasses.The lecturer demonstrates that the artificial magnetic field could mislead the birds. since earth is a big magnetic field and it can emit magnetic signals to guide the birds fly in correct direction. when the birds fly with a long distance from the cold place to a warm place, they need these magnetic signals to navigate the way. The way that the passage mentioned will affect their way.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84528301887 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4678610574 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 369.0 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.250737894 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.727272727 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 7.06452816374 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233143783369 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102464563994 0.0996497079465 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705305722774 0.0662205650399 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132122387276 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938071352476 0.0443174109184 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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