humperback whales
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in whether humpback whales use stars to navigation when they travel long distances. To begin with, the reading says that humpback whales seem intelligent enough to use stars to navigate. However, the listening argues that this explanation is not likely to be true. There are also some other animals use stars to navigate such as ducks. However, ducks are not highly intelligent, and researchers find out that this is an instinct they are born with. As a result, there are no connection between intelligence and using stars to navigate.
In addition, while the reading implies that humpback whales migrate in straight lines which is an evidence shows that they use stars to navigate, the listening suggests that this idea is also incorrect. Humpback whales travel in lines is because they sense some external force, which is earth magnetic field. Whales have some special parts in their body that can help them sense the magnetic field and orient themselves. Therefore, whales travel in straight lines is because of earth magnetic field instead of stars.
Last but not least, the reading asserts that humpback whales have a behavior call spy-hopping which can be explain by whales are looking at the stars. Whereas, the listening indicates that this is inaccurate. Some other animals, such as sharks, also have the behavior of spy-hopping, but they do this not for looking at stars to navigate, but to find their preys. Besides, researchers had find out that humpback whales usually spy-hop during the day time, when there are no stars in the sky. In other words, since other animals use spy-hopping to prey and whales spy-hop during the day, this hypothesis is not likely to be the explanation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ain by whales are looking at the stars. Whereas, the listening indicates that this is i...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...d their preys. Besides, researchers had find out that humpback whales usually spy-ho...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...d their preys. Besides, researchers had find out that humpback whales usually spy-ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, look, so, therefore, whereas, while, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05498281787 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50345470491 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460481099656 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1294432433 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0666666667 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168732228885 0.272083759551 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687914479255 0.0996497079465 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606726959705 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125305023737 0.162205337803 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350693468531 0.0443174109184 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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