People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons.
Most of the people, as a result of working, they get money. However, money sometimes is not the main goal of them. Some people are looking for other purposes such as challenging, enjoying, and health. I will develop these areas in the following paragraphs.
First of all, money, is vital for people, but challenging is necessary as well. People definitely need to feel stimulation when they are working. Thus, a person not only archive goals but also continue work. Surely, regular employee can not doing this because they do not have opportunity to choose a challenging job. However, if they have a better alternative, they could choose a different work where they find something in which they can be interested. Otherwise, in a while, they could feel extremely frustrated and quick to the job.
Second, working should be an enjoyable activity. In other word, people who has a stressful job, they do not going to stay there longer. Of course, many people are under stressful situation, but they have to figure out a balance between stressful jobs and enjoyable environment . For instance, my job is as a veterinarian in a big city, and I have to admit, when come a new difficult case which it is hard to know how to treat it, I start to feel super nervous, but at the same time, the incredible pressure that I am felling to figure out the problem, becoming a comfortable sensation.
Finally, nobody can deny that people who have work felling healthy. however, people who for any reason are not working, they could develop some diseases. Several researches have supported this statement claiming that people who are not working, they could change their metabolism. Drawing my own experience, a few years ago, I had a perfect job, but for some personal reason I had to quick it. For a while, I stayed at home where I began to feel weird and unhealthy . I had to go to the doctor and his diagnostic was that I had a severe lack of work. I could understand that any people must to work in order to keep a health body and brain.
In conclusion, money is not the only reason for working. I am convinced that there are other reasons which people have, such as challenging, enjoying, and health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is sometimes
...working, they get money. However, money sometimes is not the main goal of them. Some people ...
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Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
... work. Surely, regular employee can not doing this because they do not have opportuni...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...stressful jobs and enjoyable environment . For instance, my job is as a veterinari...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich it is hard to know how to treat it, I start to feel super nervous, but at th...
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Line 4, column 68, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...t people who have work felling healthy. however, people who for any reason are not work...
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Line 4, column 465, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...here I began to feel weird and unhealthy . I had to go to the doctor and his diagn...
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Line 4, column 586, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...ork. I could understand that any people must to work in order to keep a health body and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 385.0 270.72406181 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6961038961 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65623020351 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511688311688 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3412533791 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6086956522 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323238233667 0.272083759551 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966060083579 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585841443266 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190408489184 0.162205337803 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046609276219 0.0443174109184 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.3589403974 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.2367328918 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.7273730684 47% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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