People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons.
Most of the people, as a result of working, they get money. However, money is not sometimes the main goal of them. Some people are looking for other purposes such as challenging, enjoying, and health. I will develop these areas in the following paragraphs.
First of all, money is a vital source for people, but challenging is other necessary source as well. People definitely need to feel stimulated when they are working. Thus, people can not only archive goals but also continue work. Surely, a regular employee can not doing this because they do not have opportunity to choose a challenging job. However, if they have a better alternative, they could choose a something different to do which can fill their interested. Otherwise, in a while, they could became extremely frustrated and quick to job.
Second, working should be an enjoyable activity. In other word, people who has a stressful activity, they do not going to stay there longer. Of course, many people are under hard stress, but they have to figure out a balance between stressful jobs and enjoyable environment. For instance, my job is as a veterinarian in a huge clinic, and I have to admit, when a new difficult case come which is hard to know how to treat it, I start to feel super nervous, but at the same time, I am start to feel well under pressure, transforming that stressful moment in a comfortable sensation which is one hundred percent enjoyable.
Finally, nobody can deny that people who have work felling healthy. However, people who for any reason are not working, they could develop some diseases. Several researches have supported this statement claiming that people who are not working, they could deteriorate their body metabolism. Drawing my own experience, a few years ago, I had a perfect job, but for some personal reason I had to quick it. For a while, I stayed at home where I began to feel weird and unhealthy . I had to go to the doctor and his diagnostic was that I had a severe lack of work. I could understand that any people have to work in order to keep a health body and a health brain.
In conclusion, money is not the only reason for working. I am convinced that there are other reasons which people have, such as challenging, enjoying, and health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 394.0 270.72406181 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72335025381 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67433816146 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 3.25607064018 461% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.8573938995 49.2860985944 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9130434783 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1304347826 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321022897726 0.272083759551 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971579649781 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577538620482 0.0662205650399 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187953082355 0.162205337803 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434644404526 0.0443174109184 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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