The populations of many fish species are rapidly disappearing due to overfishing and pollution. There are many ways to address this issue, and one of the most popular is aquaculture, also known as fish farming. Raising fish in a controlled environment has many advantages in addition to providing a stable supply of food. Here are some of the most important reasons that aquaculture should be widely adopted.
First, aquaculture can help to protect coastal areas. The majority of fish farms are built on or near coastlines as they require clean seawater to operate. So, the farmers are very careful about keeping their environment clean. In addition, the farms often take up land that would otherwise be used for industry or housing, both of which generate large amounts of pollution. By occupying this land, fish farms would keep the coastal areas cleaner.
Second, aquaculture is good for local economies. Many of the regions that are best suited to aquaculture are located in poor countries that have high unemployment rates. Fish farming is intensive work that requires many people to function smoothly. Much of the labor is manual and unskilled, so anyone can do it with a little training. Therefore, creating fish farms would provide much-needed jobs to the communities where they are built.
Third, aquaculture relieves pressure on wild populations of fish. Many species of fish have declined to dangerously small populations, so they must be protected from going extinct. Creating a new and dependable supply of fish would reduce the need for fishing. If enough fish farms are constructed, they could replace the wild fish that are currently being caught and consumed. That would allow wild fish populations to recover and prevent them from being overfished again.
The reading and the lecture are about whether fish farming would be beneficial or not. The author of the articles feels that this new kind of farming would be advantageous. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the article. His position is that fish farming has long term consequences that are not taken into consideration by the article.
According to the reading, developing a fish farm in coastal area will guard the coastline from the pollution. The article mentions that industries and housing will occupy the land if fish farming is not done. Therefore, if these farms are build at coast, then they will reduce the amount of pollution as these farmers are quite thoughtful to keep the environment clean. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that fish farms does not protect coastal areas. Recent studies have shown that they alter the ecosystems in which they are present. As the mango species and other animals get affected by the farms, the coastline would move back.
Secondly, the author suggests that there will be a lot of employment opportunities because agriculture is an occupation which helps in local economies. In the article, it is said that most of the regions which are suitable for aquaculture are located in poor areas. Since, fish farming is a work which does not require much formal training, anyone can perform the task. The lecturer, however, asserts that it is not good for the locals. He goes on to say that people who live near the coastal areas do most of the fishing. If the fish they catch remains after feeding their own stomach, they will sell it in the market. If aquaculture is developed over such areas, then it would be a disaster for such families, and it will cause more unemployment.
Finally, the author posits that wild fish can have less burden of getting hunt because of fish farming. The author contends that there are a large number of fish species that have become vulnerable. If fish farms are created, then the livestock from these farms can replace the hunting of wild fish. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is that these fish are quite large in size and they will be the predator eating the wild fish. Therefore, this will actually increase the pressure on the small populations of wild fish.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lecturers'' or 'lecturer's'?
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... hunting of wild fish. In contrast, the lecturers stance is that these fish are quite lar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, however, if, second, secondly, then, therefore, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 10.4613686534 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 391.0 270.72406181 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84654731458 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48511769212 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511508951407 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 419.366225166 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9125869175 49.2860985944 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.3913043478 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258382866576 0.272083759551 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807053611482 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592731529321 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165650641609 0.162205337803 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606613476015 0.0443174109184 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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